User contributions for Jdickinson

22 November 2024

• 04:0904:09, 22 November 2024 diff hist −4 m Ural bomber →Development: Broke up sentence for better (less ambiguous) scanning. A comma would have been a step in the right direction. current
• 04:0504:05, 22 November 2024 diff hist −14 m Babette's Feast →Plot: Changed indefinite to definite article, continued to condense this paragraph. current
• 04:0304:03, 22 November 2024 diff hist −27 m Babette's Feast →Plot: Rewrote flashback in past tense (perhaps unfairly?), made one sentence more compact.

11 November 2024

• 07:3107:31, 11 November 2024 diff hist −6 m Battle of Mohács →Battle: Scanning.
• 07:2507:25, 11 November 2024 diff hist −7 m Battle of Mohács →Preparation for Mohács: Consistency, simplification.
• 07:2207:22, 11 November 2024 diff hist −88 m Battle of Mohács →Preparation for Mohács: Simplified.
• 07:1607:16, 11 November 2024 diff hist −2 m Battle of Mohács →Preparation for Mohács: Changed “them” (referring to “firepower”) to “it."
• 07:1407:14, 11 November 2024 diff hist +504 Talk:Battle of Mohács →Wandering Paragraphs in “The loss of Belgrade": new section current Tag: New topic
• 07:0907:09, 11 November 2024 diff hist 0 m Battle of Mohács →The loss of Belgrade: Changed “Papal” to “papal,” consistent with usage elsewhere in Wikipedia; but more is needed here: see the Talk page.
• 06:5506:55, 11 November 2024 diff hist −7 m Battle of Mohács →European events, and the Franco-Ottoman alliance: Changed “János Szapolyai” to "John Zápolya,” consistent with earlier usage in article. Changed to improve scanning.
• 06:4506:45, 11 November 2024 diff hist +2 m Pargalı Ibrahim Pasha →Biography: Changed “Hurrem” to “Hürrem,” consistent with article about her.
• 06:3906:39, 11 November 2024 diff hist +2 m Pargalı Ibrahim Pasha →Political career: Syntax/logic tweak.
• 06:0406:04, 11 November 2024 diff hist −4 m Suleiman the Magnificent →Conquests in Europe: Syntax tweak.
• 06:0206:02, 11 November 2024 diff hist −12 m Suleiman the Magnificent →Conquests in Europe: Simplified.
• 05:5605:56, 11 November 2024 diff hist +2 m Mihrimah Sultan (daughter of Suleiman I) Clarified conjectured meaning: Not “at least a son, if nothing more,” but “there was at least one son." current
• 05:4305:43, 11 November 2024 diff hist −2 m Roxelana →Foreign policy: Improved scanning.
• 05:4005:40, 11 November 2024 diff hist +4 m Roxelana →Controversial figure: Changed what a appeared to be part of a name to a generic descriptor. (“Shah of Iran,” used previously, is a proper noun…right?)
• 05:3605:36, 11 November 2024 diff hist −8 m Roxelana →Controversial figure: Changed to more familiar idiom.
• 05:3305:33, 11 November 2024 diff hist +2 m Roxelana →State affairs: Made typography (not quite the word I’m looking for) consistent.
• 05:2905:29, 11 November 2024 diff hist −5 m Roxelana →Relationship with Suleiman: Improved scanning (I hope).
• 05:0305:03, 11 November 2024 diff hist +5 m Illeism →In everyday speech: Rewrote to sound like a statement about someone else (them), rather than the author (one). Could also be “themselves,” per common usage.

20 October 2024

• 23:3023:30, 20 October 2024 diff hist −23 m Operation Downfall Undid revision 1252296161 by 2A02:C7C:3845:BD00:D8D5:F515:7E92:A149 (talk) “Nihongo” (not “NIHONGO”) is the language, “Nihon” is the place, per Wikipedia; but is it standard practice to give the transliterated local name of any place mentioned? Why? Tag: Undo

19 October 2024

• 22:4422:44, 19 October 2024 diff hist −5 m Container ship Undid revision 1252017234 by 83.110.201.88 (talk). At best, the change was ungrammatical and at worst meaningless. Tag: Undo

13 October 2024

• 05:5605:56, 13 October 2024 diff hist +1 m Battle of Lake Khasan →Build-up: Consistent verb tense.
• 05:5505:55, 13 October 2024 diff hist +6 m Battle of Lake Khasan →Build-up: Made verb tense consistent with Grebennik’s past tense reporting, but this sentence appears meaningless. Perhaps it uses jargon.
• 05:5305:53, 13 October 2024 diff hist −1 m Battle of Lake Khasan →Build-up: Removed unnecessary capitalization, but this sentence appears meaningless.

11 October 2024

• 22:0422:04, 11 October 2024 diff hist −1 m 1945 (Conroy novel) →Plot: Consistent verb tense. current

1 October 2024

• 06:1106:11, 1 October 2024 diff hist −51 m Operation Downfall Still trying to tighten up the last two sentences (now one) of the second paragraph.
• 06:0706:07, 1 October 2024 diff hist −6 m Operation Downfall Tried to make a sentence scan a little better.

9 September 2024

• 05:0305:03, 9 September 2024 diff hist +6 m Talk:Simon, brother of Jesus →More to the Story?: Added emphasis. current

8 September 2024

• 04:4104:41, 8 September 2024 diff hist +384 Talk:Simon, brother of Jesus →More to the Story?: new section Tag: New topic

7 September 2024

• 03:5903:59, 7 September 2024 diff hist −4 m Hallin's spheres →Uses of the terms: Made em dashes consistent with those above. Removing intermediate spaces may be the British convention? And thus arguable here. current
• 03:5603:56, 7 September 2024 diff hist −1 m Hallin's spheres →Sphere of legitimate controversy: Made em dashes consistent. Another earthshaking edit!

4 September 2024

• 04:1804:18, 4 September 2024 diff hist −22 m V-S Day →Plot introduction: Simplified.

23 August 2024

• 06:2106:21, 23 August 2024 diff hist −9 m Fascist architecture →The evolution of Italian Fascist Architecture: Wrangled run-on sentences, capitalized per usage in corresponding Wikipedia articles, linked to those articles.

12 August 2024

• 07:2607:26, 12 August 2024 diff hist 0 m Germania (city) Moved comma outside text formatting markup.
• 06:2206:22, 12 August 2024 diff hist −8 m Corn smut →Industrial biotechnology: Just trying to come up with somewhat more graceful phrasing.
• 06:1706:17, 12 August 2024 diff hist −11 m Corn smut →Environment: “Of the like” might have been “or the like,” but the sentence lives if it’s removed completely. There are many viable ways to rewrite this.

8 August 2024

• 04:4604:46, 8 August 2024 diff hist 0 m Fascist architecture Capitalized “jewish."
• 04:4504:45, 8 August 2024 diff hist 0 m Fascist architecture Removed hyphens from “National-Socialism” and “National-Socialist.”
• 04:4204:42, 8 August 2024 diff hist 0 m Fascist architecture Changed “german” to “German” and “germany” to “Germany."

7 August 2024

• 22:5222:52, 7 August 2024 diff hist −81 m Fascist architecture Eliminated some run-on sentences, improved syntax. Much, much more is called for, apart from any higher-level argument the previous revision may provoke.

6 August 2024

• 23:0223:02, 6 August 2024 diff hist 0 m Battle of Fredericksburg →Marye's Heights, December 13 {{Anchor|Marye's Heights}}: Capitalized an instance of “Union."

19 July 2024

• 03:1803:18, 19 July 2024 diff hist +4 m Shrapnel shell A definite article seemed called for.

17 July 2024

• 04:2104:21, 17 July 2024 diff hist +2 m Parrott rifle →The 300-pound solution: Changed “in” to “inch” for consistency.
• 03:5103:51, 17 July 2024 diff hist −25 m Battle of Fredericksburg →Battlefield preservation: Simplified.
• 03:4103:41, 17 July 2024 diff hist 0 m Battle of Fredericksburg →Marye's Heights, December 13 {{Anchor|Marye's Heights}}: Assuming we want to keep this melodrama, a hyphen is called for.
• 03:4003:40, 17 July 2024 diff hist 0 m Battle of Fredericksburg →Marye's Heights, December 13 {{Anchor|Marye's Heights}}: Can’t see why “muskets” should be capitalized here.
• 03:3903:39, 17 July 2024 diff hist +1 m Battle of Fredericksburg →Marye's Heights, December 13 {{Anchor|Marye's Heights}}: Guessing that Hancock was not order to support French and himself, added a disambiguating comma.

24 June 2024

• 07:0207:02, 24 June 2024 diff hist 0 m Enchytraeidae Changed “Grindal Worm” to “Grindal worm,” consistent with usage elsewhere in Wikipedia. current