User contributions for Ramsulator

15 August 2024

• 23:0523:05, 15 August 2024 diff hist +1 m Association for Slavic, East European, and Eurasian Studies I Changed "was" to "were" to agree with the plural subject "countries": "A number of countries of central and eastern Europe were influenced or controlled by the Soviet Union." current Tags: Visual edit Newcomer task Newcomer task: copyedit
• 22:5722:57, 15 August 2024 diff hist −3 m Momentum Adventure "Momentum Adventure is dedicated to offering unique experiences that introduce clients to new activities and destinations." - It would be clearer if you replaced "introduce" with "expose." It should be: "Momentum Adventure is dedicated to offering unique experiences that expose clients to new activities and destinations." Tags: Visual edit Newcomer task Newcomer task: copyedit
• 22:5522:55, 15 August 2024 diff hist +3 m Bowers & Wilkins "The diamond tweeter was developed to create the optimal ratio of tweeter dome mass and material stiffness." - The phrase "optimal ratio of tweeter dome mass and material stiffness" could be clearer if "optimal" is replaced with "an optimal" for better readability. It should be: "The diamond tweeter was developed to create an optimal ratio of tweeter dome mass and material stiffness." Tags: Visual edit Newcomer task Newcomer task: copyedit
• 22:4922:49, 15 August 2024 diff hist −1 m Within (company) Comma Usage: The phrase "Meta Platforms Inc., acquired the company" should not have a comma between "Inc." and "acquired." It should read: "Meta Platforms Inc. acquired the company." Tags: Visual edit Newcomer task Newcomer task: copyedit
• 22:2422:24, 15 August 2024 diff hist −4 m Dannemann Cigars Comma Usage: The sentence "After the war, Geraldo regained the possession of the company, however, in 1954, he filed for bankruptcy." should use a semicolon or a period instead of the comma before "however." It should read: "After the war, Geraldo regained the possession of the company; however, in 1954, he filed for bankruptcy." or "After the war, Geraldo regained the possession of the company. However, in 1954, he filed for bankruptcy." Tags: Visual edit Newcomer task Newcomer task: copyedit
• 22:2122:21, 15 August 2024 diff hist −1 m Chartered Governance Institute Punctuation: In the sentence "A person who has completed the CGQP and satisfying the prescribed working experience requirement is eligible for election as an associate or fellow of the institute," the word "satisfying" should be "satisfies" to match the tense correctly. So it should read: "A person who has completed the CGQP and satisfies the prescribed working experience requirement is eligible for election as an associate or fellow of the institute." Tags: Visual edit Newcomer task Newcomer task: copyedit
• 22:1722:17, 15 August 2024 diff hist 0 m Chewits In the "Former advertising slogans" section, the slogan “Chew it like Newport County Football club” should have "Football Club" capitalized consistently. It should be “Chew it like Newport County Football Club.” Tags: Visual edit Newcomer task Newcomer task: copyedit
• 22:1322:13, 15 August 2024 diff hist −4 m Lucky Chinatown Grammar/Word Choice: In the phrase "It houses a wide selection of international fashion brands and high-end shopping to a part of the Manila known for bargain centers and budget shopping," the phrase "to a part of the Manila" should be revised for clarity. It would be better as "in a part of Manila" or "in an area of Manila." Tags: Visual edit Newcomer task Newcomer task: copyedit
• 22:0722:07, 15 August 2024 diff hist 0 m NetSys In the sentence "The main product was the Weather forecaster," "Weather Forecaster" should be capitalized consistently, like "Weather Forecaster," if it's the name of a specific product. current Tags: Visual edit Newcomer task Newcomer task: copyedit