Talk:HMS Sheffield (C24)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Klutserke (talk · contribs) 21:48, 22 October 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 08:55, 15 December 2024 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 08:55, 15 December 2024 (UTC)

• Comments: @Sturmvogel 66 and Klutserke: Where are we regarding the status of this article? It's been a while since this review was updated and with the GANR backlog drive coming up I want to make sure all potential articles are able to be included. IntentionallyDense ^(Contribs) 23:05, 25 December 2024 (UTC)

  Hoi @IntentionallyDense, this is my first GA review submission. I will pick up any remarks mentioned here but I don't have an idea when remarks will be logged Klutserke (talk) 18:56, 27 December 2024 (UTC)

• Images appropriately licensed
• Earwig reports only 16%
• The lede is a bit short for such a long article; see German cruiser Prinz Eugen for an example on how to write a lede for a ship. Remember that you're summarizing the main body (WP:LEAD), so don't fill it out with excessive detail. It's hard to find a balance, but do your best.
• Let me add to your difficulties with the lede by noting that you refer to the actions with the Bismarck and Scharnhorst twice. Once is enough.
  • I had a go at it, could you review ?
• The motto, nickname and pennant number in the infobox need citations unless they're cited in the main body or lede, which is preferable
  • I reffed the pennant and yard nbr, the nickname is ref'd in the characteristic chapter
• All measurements should have imperial and metric conversions and the unfamiliar ones should be linked, including long tons
  • fixed on tonnage and oil capacity, any other places left ?
• The ship was built and scrapped before the British went to the metric system. All measurements should be in imperial first with a metric conversion
  • fixed - I checked how it's done on other pages.
• I'm fussy about the infobox and have fixed a large number of minor issues myself. That said you need to spell out quadruple and add links to the radars where they have their own article
  • Ok done
• There are a lot of missing links to nautical and aviation jargon: class, laid down, launched, battleship, torpedo bomber, scrapped, decommissioned, reserve, etc.
  • I added some links. just a few doubts : town-class is linked, is that what you meant with 'class' ? Also, commisioning and decommissionning are covered by the same article, should i link twice nevertheless ?
• The ship had an aircraft catapult, hangars and aircraft. Why are they not in the infobox? Or the main body?
  • added in characteristics and infobox
• Similarly, where's the range information?
  • added both in characteristics and infobox
• Are you aware that the ship has a biography? Ronald Basset's HMS Sheffield: The Life and Times of 'Old Shiny'. Might be useful borrow or acquire a copy.
  • Added under 'further reading'.
• I'm not trying to denigrate your work here; you've done pretty well for a first-time GA nomination. I just think that's it's essential to refer to a book specifically about a ship, when writing about said ship.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:10, 29 December 2024 (UTC)

  Hoi, thx for your effort. indeed it's a first time GA nomination, For B-class referencing seems to be the most important thing, for GA it's more about content i see. I had no idea to what kind of thing to pay attention to for GA, so that's more clear now. I'll pick up your points one by one and add comment inline. Klutserke (talk) 22:01, 29 December 2024 (UTC)

• I'll start going through the service section later tonight or tomorrow.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:12, 29 December 2024 (UTC)