Template:Did you know nominations/Tadeusz Szeligowski
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The result was: rejected by rʨanaɢ (talk) 05:04, 5 November 2011 (UTC)
Tadeusz Szeligowski
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- ... that Tadeusz Szeligowski (pictured) complemented his studies in music in the years 1929-1931 in Paris, studying composition with Nadia Boulanger and orchestration with Paul Dukas?
- Reviewed: I still haven't reviewed any nomination, but I will post it here when it's done.
- Comment: Article created in my userspace on August 15, moved to mainspace on August 16.
Created by Krenakarore (talk). Self nom at 20:57, 17 August 2011 (UTC)
- Article is basically fine--long enough, decently sourced, etc. But I have issues--sorry. I made a few minor copy edits to the article, but more needs to be done. For instance, the facts in the "As a music writer" aren't really verified in the given source: I don't see COPSA mentioned in the source, for instance. There's another problem: the article wavers between close paraphrase and direct quotation. In the paragraph mentioned, "high level presentations" is a direct quote from the source (and both are incorrectly hyphenated, I might add), and it's the same in the "Musical education" section, with "He met there leading European composers" (source) and "There he met many of the leading composers" (article). None of them are really egregious, but first of all, a kind of wooden prose is exported from the source to the article, and second, the paraphrases are so close as to be a bit too close, for my taste.
Other issues: all the awards need to be verified individually (and what is "II Composers' Competition"? "Il"? "Second", in Roman numerals?) In "Compositions", there are titles with wikilinks in them, which strikes me as unelegant (don't know what the MoS has to say on the topic). Finally, there's a long list of pupils, which lacks punctuation, and contains way too many red links for my taste. Drmies (talk) 03:13, 18 August 2011 (UTC)
Done Article flaws reviewed and enhanced by nominator User:Krenakarore on 18-19 August. Krenakarore (talk) 10:12, 19 August 2011 (UTC)
- Article is basically fine--long enough, decently sourced, etc. But I have issues--sorry. I made a few minor copy edits to the article, but more needs to be done. For instance, the facts in the "As a music writer" aren't really verified in the given source: I don't see COPSA mentioned in the source, for instance. There's another problem: the article wavers between close paraphrase and direct quotation. In the paragraph mentioned, "high level presentations" is a direct quote from the source (and both are incorrectly hyphenated, I might add), and it's the same in the "Musical education" section, with "He met there leading European composers" (source) and "There he met many of the leading composers" (article). None of them are really egregious, but first of all, a kind of wooden prose is exported from the source to the article, and second, the paraphrases are so close as to be a bit too close, for my taste.
- Removed from queue by User:Nikkimaria due to paraphrasing concerns, as noted at the article's talk page. Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:16, 27 August 2011 (UTC)
Article still has close paraphrasing issues after several days. Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:57, 3 September 2011 (UTC)
