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User:Fan Qi7/Justina Blakeney/Owen Gunderman Peer Review

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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Fan Qi7

Link to draft you're reviewing
Justina Blakeney
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Justina Blakeney

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Lead looks good. Might take out one of "bright colorful and vibrant" as they are very similar descriptions.

Maybe more could be added to the career section? The chronology jumps from her being in school to her starting her own brand. Is there more to be mentioned in between?

Information seems very good and well written. Adding a but more to her story could round out the article.