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User:Hotpink789!/Chris Hoofnagle/Penguinblueberry Peer Review

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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Hotpink789!

Link to draft you're reviewing
User:Hotpink789!/Chris Hoofnagle
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Chris Hoofnagle

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Lead

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Guiding questions:

  • Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
    • Yes - I might add a sentence that outlines the different consumer privacy contributions?
  • Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
    • Yes
  • Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
    • Yes
  • Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
    • Yes, the information about whether or not young people like privacy is not included in the sections
  • Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
    • It is concise

Content

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Guiding questions:

  • Is the content added relevant to the topic?
    • Yes, but i wonder if there could be any information added about Hoofnagle's background/position before you begin talking about his contributions to the field

Tone and Balance

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Guiding questions:

No large tone / balance problems. Is there any controversy related to this man? If so, maybe include that?

Sources and References

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Guiding questions:

Content is backed up by reliable sources of information & sources are relatively current given that not everything the article references is current. Links work.

Organization

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Guiding questions:

Yes -

EVALUATE DRAFTED CHANGES TWO

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Lead

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Guiding questions:

  • Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
    • Yes - I might add a sentence that outlines the different consumer privacy contributions?
  • Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
    • Yes, the information about whether or not young people like privacy is not included in the sectioN

Content

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Guiding questions:

  • Is the content added relevant to the topic?
    • Yes, but i wonder if there could be any information added about Hoofnagle's background/position before you begin talking about his contributions to the field

Tone and Balance

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Guiding questions:

No large tone / balance problems. Is there any controversy related to this man? If so, maybe include that?

Sources and References

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Guiding questions:

Content is backed up by reliable sources of information & sources are relatively current given that not everything the article references is current. Links work.

MISSING A CITE FOR THE CPDP

Organization

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Guiding questions:

Yes -