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User:Isaacsj3/Paisley Caves/MJ Fielder-Jellsey Peer Review

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General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Isaacsj3

Link to draft you're reviewing
User:Isaacsj3/Paisley Caves
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Paisley Caves

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Lead: This looks good! The lead is concise, but provides a lot of specific information without being too overwhelming.

Content: This looks good! It's adding useful information about points of contention surrounding the site and more information about the Western Stemmed Tradition, though a little more could be added here to differentiate them from the Clovis points.

Tone and Balance: This looks good as well; everything added is neutral and does not overrepresent any viewpoints or aspects of these caves.

Sources and References: There are some unfinished elements in the references, but that is totally fine! It's just a draft. The links all work and the references are very thorough.

Organization: The organization looks good, though in the menu it may be better to make references its own heading rather than a subheading of Western Stemmed Tradition. Otherwise it is well-written and easy to understand!

Images and Media: Since we don't know how to add images yet, I don't think you need to worry about this!

Overall Impressions: The article certainly feels more complete with the inclusion of points of contention and more about the geology of the area. Once the end is finished, this article will be well-rounded! My main critique would be in the Western Stemmed Tradition section, which is currently unfinished, the sentence about the diet feels out of place, though I think it is interesting and belongs in the article. I would either move it or ensure it connects with this section!

Overall this is coming along nicely, Josh!