User:Jstrathyan/Novosphingobium pentaromativorans/Iowamicrochick Peer Review
Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
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General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing?
Jstrathyan
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:Jstrathyan/Novosphingobium pentaromativorans
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Novosphingobium pentaromativorans
Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit](Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)
Hi Jess,
Overall, I think your article is in great shape! :)
A lot of the comments below are just me being picky, so do with them what you will.
Best,
Faith
Lead
- I agree, the lead does not need any editing
Characteristics
First Paragraph:
-Personal preference: I would split the second sentence into two sentences. I would have one sentence describing the phenotypic characteristics and the second describing where it was first isolated. That way there isn't too much information crammed into one sentence.
-Third sentence: too many "and"s. I would include the optimal pH and NaCl concentration in a separate sentence.
Second Paragraph:
-Third sentence - I would describe how "homology" was confirmed. Average nucleotide identity? DNA-DNA hybridization?
Polycyclic aromatic hydrocarbon degradation
First Paragraph:
-Awesome paragraph! - love how you explain the importance of HMW PAH bioremediation to the reader.
-Last sentence; add "the" -- "study the proteins used in the degradation"
Second Paragraph:
-Second sentence - the transition from stating the enzyme to listing the two potential pathways is a little awkward
-Love how you noticed that some of the genes involved in the pathway are on the plasmid.
Final Thoughts
-If you are itching to add more information, I would look into what the yellow-pigment is comprised of - carotenoid?