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User:Lotustone/Royal Tomb of Akhenaten/W1kiw0000t Peer Review

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Whose work are you reviewing?

Lotustone

Link to draft you're reviewing
User:Lotustone/Royal Tomb of Akhenaten#cite note-:0-7
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Royal Tomb of Akhenaten

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The location and architecture section is very well detailed. Your descriptions make it easy to mentally picture/configure how the the site lay out is believed to have been. The only critique I have for this section is perhaps providing the tomb numbers if available in sources or numbering them for the sake of organization and easier reading. For example, the first sentence in the second paragraph of this section "In addition to Akhenaten's burial chamber, the tomb also contained another finished burial chamber and one unfinished chamber" was a bit difficult to follow due to the repetitive us of chamber, followed by their vague distinctions. Overall, this section provides a ton of information with appropriate links and references to support the information.

Your intro provides an informative and concise description of what information the page will have. Though they are brief insights, it is well organized and easy to follow and even highlights the arguments and controversy revolving the site, which makes it more exciting to follow. You did a good job of writing about these controversies in the following section by writing about the found artifacts and how they support each stance of the dating of the discovery of the tomb.