User:Politicaladventure/Pollution in the United States/Bandar122 Peer Review

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User:Politicaladventure/Pollution in the United States

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Peer Review of User:Politicaladventure/Pollution in the United States

Lead

• Content Updates: The newly added parts regarding trash, air, and water pollution have not been specifically updated in the lead. To give a concise summary in the lead section, think about summarizing the main additions..
• Introductory Sentence: The article's topic is well covered in the introduction, but to give readers an idea of the extent of the updates, it could be helpful to provide a few highlights of recent developments.

Content

• Relevance and Update: The added content on plastic waste and water pollution is highly relevant to the article and provides up-to-date information. Including recent statistics helps give context and significance to the issue of pollution.
• Missing or Unnecessary Content: The updated material in the additional content about plastic waste and water pollution is extremely pertinent to the subject. Adding current data helps put the environmental problem in perspective and highlight its importance.
• Equity Gaps: Equity gaps, such as the disproportionate harm that pollution causes to underprivileged areas, are not specifically addressed in the content. The article would be much stronger if it included a discussion of environmental justice.

Tone and Balance

• Neutrality: Phrases like "we have seen that it has led to many issues" could be more objective, but the tone is often neutral. Instead, clearly present the facts without expressing any opinions.
• Balanced Representation: Consider including examples of successful mitigation efforts or policies that have reduced pollution.

Sources and References

• Reliability and Accuracy: The sources used are reliable, including academic papers and official reports. However, ensure that every claim, especially those involving data, is supported by a citation.
• Current and Thorough Sources: The references are thorough and recent, but there could be a few more diverse sources, particularly those that cover the social impact of pollution in the United States.
• Citation Format: The citations appear to be formatted correctly, using Wikipedia’s official method. Ensure each paragraph or section with new information has corresponding citations.

Organization

• Clarity and Conciseness: To make some sections easier to understand, such the description of plastic trash, they may be condensed. To make the information more accessible to a larger audience, steer clear of extremely technical jargon wherever you can.
• Section Structure: The newly added material is arranged neatly, with sections that distinguish between different kinds of pollutants. To further deconstruct each section and make it easier for readers to follow, think about including subheadings.

Images and Media

• No images have been added to the draft.

Overall Impressions

• Improvement: The added content improves the article by providing updated and relevant information on pollution in the U.S. However, the balance could be improved by including content about progress and mitigation efforts.
• Strengths: The use of recent statistics and reliable sources strengthens the article and provides a detailed overview of current pollution issues.
• Suggestions for Improvement:

 * Summarize key updates in the lead section.
 * Add content on pollution improvements to provide a balanced perspective.
 * Include a discussion on how pollution affects marginalized communities to address equity gaps.