User:Scorpio1028/Birthday Letters/Leinaala03 Peer Review
General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing?
Scorpio1028
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Scorpio1028/Birthday_Letters?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Birthday Letters
Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit]First of all, I didn't even realize you're writing about a Ted Hughes poem and I'm writing about a Sylvia Plath poem!!
I noticed you didn't change anything in the Lead paragraph, I would consider adding citations and references to the summarization of his awards for the book. Additionally, maybe talk about the most famous poems within the book, their accolades, effects, or interpretations because if I opened a wiki page for a book, I'd want the lead paragraph to tell me what it's about just as much as the controversy/background.
Also, this wiki page is about the book of poems, so I'm not sure giving so much background on his relationship with Plath is distinctly important to the novel, I almost like the original background paragraph in the article more because it gives me more information of the book itself. For your background paragraph, I really think you need citations for the information before the last sentence. I have no idea where you found it so it's important to include citations. Also, I don't know how trustworthy the Guardian is, as they're a news service so they may embellish. Maybe look for more concrete sources to serve as a foundation for your information in the background paragraph, if you even choose to include it. I love how in the current article, they tie in some of the poems in the book itself as context/reference to background information. Maybe you could do that for some of your facts/info you've written? So it seems more applicable to the book itself.
I don't really understand why you moved the original "background" section into "controversy" because I think the first paragraph of the "controversy" section is good background, and I think the second paragraph of your "background" section is talk on the controversy, so I'm a little confused on the division there. Also, way more sources would be good! For both the previously written information as well as your own claims.
Overall, this really feels like an article on Plath and Hughes' relationship, I wish there was more on the book of poems itself. Maybe their themes, the most famous poems, or even certain poem's relations to the rocky relationship between the two poets mentioned. I just feel like I'm not getting anything about the book. You could even try to find why he wrote it, published it so late, or how it was received publicly after his death. You mentioned Hughes was demonized by the press after Plath's expose and death, but you also said this book received a lot of warmth and approval- how did that switch occur? Was Hughes "forgiven" or understood more after this publication and his death? I feel like that could be a whole additional section because I wanna know and I'm not even the author haha! Other than the content and lack of sources, I really like your diction and breaking up of information in the section you wrote!