User:Sjburton18/Something Like a War/Dlnappo Peer Review

Peer review

This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

• Sjburton18 and Tlee43
• Something Like a War

Lead

Guiding questions:

• Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? - Yes
• Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? - Yes it does
• Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
• Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
• Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added relevant to the topic?
• Is the content added up-to-date?
• Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added neutral?
• Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
• Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
• Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Sources and References

Guiding questions:

• Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
• Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
• Are the sources current?
• Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization

Guiding questions:

• Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
• Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
• Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

• Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? - Yes, the article itself is more complete. The original article had a very short and vaguely descriptive plot of the overall movie. The updated sandbox has a more concise introduction/summary of the overall movie. It also adds to subtopics that were prevalent in the movie and used other articles to find more information to develop a more informational discussion about Reproductive Oppression and Family Planning Reforms in India.
• What are the strengths of the content added? - I find one of the major strengths of the content added would be the addition of Reproduction Oppression and Family Planning Reforms in India because rather than just giving a summary of the movie, they pulled out these two important aspects from it and brought other outside sources into their work to develop very informational sections about these topics while having it all flow together.
• How can the content added be improved? - One thing I would consider revising in the first paragraph of the content added is that there is a part that sounds like a direct quote from the movie n the fourth sentence. I would possibly revise it so it sounds a little more natural and maybe turn it into a direct quote so that the film can be directly cited.

Overall evaluation

Overall, I think the content added to the article is very beneficial to the wikipedia page because it address specific moments in the film and it is also much more informational than what is currently on the wikipedia page for this film. The citations and references all work and were well used throughout the article to elaborate upon different aspects in the film that the original wikipedia page failed to have.