User:Thatcrypticrobyn/Slender-billed vulture/Purple.peonies1 Peer Review
General info
[edit]- Whose work are you reviewing?
Thatcrypticrobyn
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:Thatcrypticrobyn/Slender-billed vulture:
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Evaluate the drafted changes
[edit]Lead:
[edit]- The lead of the original wikipedia article could be updated to include a very brief description of each of the article's major sections to give the reader an idea of what is to come in the article
- Be sure any additions made to the lead are concise and include only information that is found in the article (no new information)
Content:
[edit]- I really like the content you added to the description section as I believe it adds a lot to the article. I would just ensure that you check for spelling and grammar.
- I like what you added to the distribution and habitat section. I would try to add more descriptions on what exactly heir habitat looks like as well. On the last sentence, make sure you make that a complete sentence.
- I really like how you've added new sections on ecology and behavior and included information on breeding. I think that is an important add and that it was missing before. I would recommend changing the title "feeding" to "diet" though.
- Just as a reminder, ensure that any information you add to the next few sections is up to date.
Tone and Balance:
[edit]- The content added was neutral and did not attempt to persuade
Sources and References:
[edit]- Be sure to cite anything added with trusted sources
- Be sure that all sources are current
- If possible, find peer reviewed article sources
- I would like to see more than two sites used for your information if at all possible. Especially in the new sections you added on ecology and behavior, it would just make that section stronger if you had multiple different sources backing up the information.
Organization:
[edit]- The original article is structured well and I think your additions will flow nicely.
- Ensure that any added content is well written and check for grammar and spelling throughout the article
Overall Impression:
[edit]Overall I think that you have contributed very good information to this article and that you should keep going at the rate you are. I would try to find more sources to use as well. I would also recommend adding pictures to the article to give the reader something to look at when you are describing certain features.