User talk:Clarechenoweth

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Wikification

Please note, there is a lot more to wikification than just adding some internal links. Please read WP:WIKI for more information on wikification... good luck, and happy editing... - Adolphus79 (talk) 06:10, 22 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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{{Helpme}}Thanks for your help in getting this page up and running. I'm new to Wikipedia so apologies for the mistakes etc. I'm just struggling with how to make this page less like 'an advertisement'. Because the centre is set up to assist people in the community with cannabis use problems and is a not for profit organisation, I thought this would remove it from the commercial type of organisations which might try to advertise on Wikipedia. I'm not sure how I can write it to make it seem less like advertising, which I didn't intend it to be. Thanks for your help, i look forward to hearing back about what I can do to improve it.

It's been tagged with {{advertisement}}, so that'll attract other editors who are good at neutralizing the tone of articles. I'll take a look at it first. Ten Pound ~~Hammer~~ Farfel and his otters • ^{(Broken clamshells• Otter chirps)} 03:31, 23 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Okay. One of the biggest problems was all the cannabis-related facts that it listed off. Those aren't really relevant to the context of the foundation itself (although they are relevant!), and are considered WP:COATRACK material, so I removed them. There was also one quote from someone else that didn't look relevant either, so I removed it. The article still needs work, and I'm not sure that the subject meets WP:ORG, but I'm not as familiar with articles on organizations. Ten Pound ~~Hammer~~ Farfel and his otters • ^{(Broken clamshells• Otter chirps)} 03:42, 23 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

{{helpme}}Thanks for your feedback. I just made an important alteration to the centre's stated aim, as our aim isn't to 'cut cannabis use' but rather to 'reduce harm associated with cannabis use'. When we wrote this page we tried to model it on our 'parent' organisation the University of New South Wales so that's why we were confused as to why it seemed like an advertisement. But I understand the relevance points you made, thank you for explaining that. Thanks again for your help. (Clarechenoweth (talk) 22:49, 24 July 2008 (UTC))[reply]

Starting to look better now. You just need some third party sources (see WP:RS). Ten Pound Hammer and his otters • ^{(Broken clamshells• Otter chirps • HELP!)} 23:28, 24 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

{{help me}}Thanks for your help. I've added a third party source to improve the article as per the suggestion. Is it possible to remove the sign saying that it reads like an advertisement yet? Any more suggestions for how I can improve it are welcome. Thanks again. (149.171.183.76 (talk) 02:21, 4 August 2008 (UTC))[reply]

Patience, young jedi! Great articles don't happen overnight. However, you're doing very well. I wouldn't remove the tag just yet, because there is still some work that needs to be done. Like in the lede, the use of "high quality" sounds advertish. You should also give it a once over for weasel words, that seems to be a problem as well. Keep it up! L'Aquatique[talk] 02:32, 4 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]