User talk:Thecptawesome/Diabetic foot infection
Overall, you have done an awesome job! You have great sources, and I really like the organization and readability of your article. Seriously great job! Below are comments about each individual section. Your article will be even better with some pictures - good luck finding a not to gross pic (haha)!
intro - I would add this section to before the table of contents by essentially remove the heading of “introduction” cuz I feel most Wikipedia pages have an overview section above the table of contents - add “person” after “diabetic” or switch it to “a person with diabetes” - The sentence that begins “foot ulcers…” should probably be moved to 2nd paragraph – in first sentence “They most often form following a diabetic foot ulcer though not all foot ulcers become infected”
mechanism - intro sentence should say “the pathophys of DM includes neuropathy, PAD, and trauma” without abbreviations tho - in neuropathy 1st sentence it should be “affect” not “effect” - link polyneuropathy, atrophy, metatarsal, hyperglycemia, hyperlipidemia, atherosclerosis, tibial arteries, perfusion, gangrene, cellulitis, necrotizing fasciitis, osteomyelitis, MRSA, abx resistance - in PAD first sentence should say “lead” not “leads” and “developing” not “development of” - fix comma after nec fasc
diagnosis: - in intro part say medical history and physical exam - First sentence of H&P might be better if it says “Taking a history should include asking diabetic patients about any known recent foot trauma. Physical exam should include inspection of LE for … (your list of things)” - sentence that says “ulcers do occur’ change to “can occur” - link purulence to pus, posterior tibial, dorsal pedis, PAD, ABI, osteomyelitis, xray, MRI, MRA, US - move the 2 sentences that start with “ulcer” and “diagnosis of an infected” to end of paragraph cuz the stuff after that goes into more detail on physical exam stuff and should follow first sentences - in imaging change “elucidate” to “show” cuz it is less big/fancy
management - first sentence should say “includes” - link fascia, gangrene, tissue necrosis, debridement, revascularization, MRSA
prevention - first sentence should say “includes” - delete “contributory” cuz it isn’t necessary - link co morbidities, blood glucose, hypertension - last sentence should be period and then new sentence “Those with risk factors require more frequent examinations, especially in those with a prior ulcer or amputation who need examinations every 1-2 months”