Wikipedia:WikiProject India/Peer review/Arutprakasa Vallalar Chidambaram Ramalinga Swamigal
This important article in general requires an indepth Peer review. Though this article was not started by me, I had done major edits (re-construction) recently. --Logic riches (talk) 17:46, 13 June 2008 (UTC)
Lead
- He is commonly known in India and across the world as Vallalar (Tamil: வள்ளலார்).
Here The name in Tamil Script is unnecessary. It serves no purpose on an English Wikipedia.
- According to Suddha Sanmarga, the prime aspects of human life should be love connected with charity and divine practice leading to achievement of pure knowledge.
Details on Suddha Sanmarga not required in the Lead. Move it somewhere in the main prose.
- Prefer splitting the Lead.
Infobox
- Does the Image:Vallalar.jpg satisfy the Non-free / fair use media rationale properly?
Early Life
- Wikilink to Pillai is no way related to Ramiah Pillai. Please take care.
- By a quirk of fate Ramayyah Pillai's first five wives had died childless and in quick succession.
You need not mention quirk of fate. Just mention Ramayyah Pillai's first five wives had died childless and in quick succession.
Notable happening during childhood
- When Ramalingam was five years old, Sabhapati, decided to formally educate his youngest sibling Ramalingam but the young child however showed a deep disinclination towards formal education but on the otherhand preferring trips to the local Kandasamy temple.
The Kandasmy temple is linked with the List of Hindu temples. They don't have any relation.
- The first reward came in the form of a vision of Lord Muruga
Please avoid bolding anything. If you want to make anything distinct, italicize it.
- His elder brother Sabhapati was a learned scholar and upanyasaka (one who tells religious stories).
It's a good practice to italicize things for which you provide english explanation. In this case, upanyasaka.
- It so happened that once Ramalingam had to substitute for his brother at an upanyasam session.
What's the difference between an upanyasam and upanyasaka. Because, both wikilink to the same page.
- His brilliant exposition and uninterrupted flow of words while enunciating a verse from the `Periyapuranam' by Shaivism an epic poem by Sekkizhar narrating the episodes connected with the 63 Nayanars amazed the onlookers.
Words like brilliant are exaggerations.
- Later his brother also graciously acknowledged the mental and spiritual superiority of his brother.
Again, graciously is exaggeration.
His teachings
- - One of the primary teaching of valallar is "Service to mankind is path of moksha".
Avoid bold, italicize instead.
- Around 1870 he established the Sathaya Gyana Sabai, hall of True Wisdom Forum and ensuring it was entirely secular .
Shouldn't the hall of True Wisdom be in parantheses.
- I think there is a bit trivia although I am not sure.
Chennai Kandha kottam
- The temple description have absolutely no relation with Arutprakasa Vallalar Chidambaram Ramalinga Swamigal. I suggest you remove these unnecessary trivial details.
Ramalinga Swamigal's Literary works
- Avoid bullets and write it in paragraph form.
Songs
- Again, Avoid bullets and write it in paragraph form.