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Nominator: BeanieFan11 (talk · contribs) 15:23, 17 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 13:35, 18 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
  • Added some cats.
  • He was in the MLB team's cat instead of the NFL one. I changed it.
  • Change lead to American professional football.
    • Changed.
  • "Chicago / St. Louis Cardinals from 1933" to "Chicago / St. Louis Cardinals of the National Football League (NFL) from 1933"
    • Changed.
  • No date for the pic I guess?
    • Added that it was in 1950.
  • "He worked with a rug-cleaning business owned by Charles Bidwill which led to his opportunity in sports" change to "future Chicago Cardinals executive Charles Bidwell"
    • Changed.
  • Once you change the above, we can probably remove "which led to his opportunity in sports" otherwise that sentence gets a little wordy?
    • Changed.
  • If you do the stuff above, then unlink Chicago Cardinals in the first sentence of the next section.
    • Changed.
  • "He served in the position of business manager and, starting in 1936, acted as their general manager" Add commas where bolded.
    • Changed.
  • Did you see in the navbox where it says he was an assistant coach? What's that all about?
    • That was added here (after I had created the article) – I changed it to "Executives" since he was not a coach.
  • Is there any info on where he went to high school or college or anything?
    • His early life was pretty obscure.

That's all. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 13:35, 18 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.